Friday, February 3, 2012

Backstory Part II

So last time I left off we were just fleeing Troy, and first thing Aeneas decided to do, in his new found leading position is to stop on the coast of Antander and to build completely new ships. Personally I felt we were a little too close to the Danaan army to just stop and build new ships. I mean what if they sent a party out to kill off the fleeing Trojans? We would have been sitting ducks! Lucky it didn't turn out like that and we finished the new ships and continues not long afterwards

Our next destination was Thrace, where in Aeneas attempted to offer sacrifices. But things can never be normal with Aeneas around can they? He starts pulling at some roots, and blood starts pouring out. Turns out that specific tree, out of all the other trees around, just happened to be the spirit of a son of Priam who was slain as a result of Troy's demise. Upon seeing this Aeneas holds a funeral for the tree, and I gotta say. Tree funerals...pretty boring. Anyways, once that was finished we headed South to Delos.

In Delos Aeneas received a prophecy from Apollo saying to go to the land of our ancestors. Immediately I though of Dardanus, but Aeneas senile old man insisted that Apollo was refering to Crete. Of course, Aeneas sided with his father and we embarked for Crete. At this point I'm starting to doubt even Aeneas' luck. Sure his demigod status gives him an otherwise otherworldly sense of direction, but I've started to consider leaving the group if they continued on such insane paths. 

For now, I decided to stick with the group, and when we do finally reach Crete Aeneas decided to settle there, and build a city. Not even a week into the construction of this new city did a deadly plague settle in the area. We left everything, and took to the sail immediately, so as to escape the plague. What Aeneas didn't consider during this was that there was a terrible storm on the horizon, which he would have noticed if he wasn't so ignorant.

So as to be expected we crashed. Solid leader skills there Aeneas. If this guy is the son of a god he sure doesn't seem to have any particular innate skills other than pure dumb luck. His entire life he's been protected by fates, or so it seemed. Now he's just leading us into more and more bad luck though. Maybe he and his mom were in a fight, and this was her way of punishing her. I'm really not very sure exactly how the gods interact with their demigod children. Back to the point though, the island we crashed on was non other than the home of the harpies. Fantastic, just fantastic. 

I warned Aeneas to do as little to annoy the the harpies as possible. So can you guess what the first thing he does is? He goes with a group of men and slaughter dozens of cattle. It couldn't have been more than X minutes before what seemed like the entirety of the harpy race was at our neck! As if fighting off those horrid creatures wasn't bad enough one of the cursed us with a curse of hunger before we could flee the Island. At this point its needless to say that I was a little angry with Aeneas.

We stop at a nearby island and make an offering to Apollo. Cuz the gods have been sooooo helpful already....

Next we head to Buthrotum where we ran into Andromache and Helenus. Helenus has this beautiful city under his control, and despite pleading on my part Aeneas decided to leave after hearing some prophecy by Helenus. Why couldn't we have stayed there and helped Helenus to rebuild the Trojan race?

So instead of resting safely in an already established city Aeneas decided to go right past Scylla. As if that wasn't bad enough, where do we decide to stop and rest? None other than the island of the cyclops. 

Now, I'm not proud of this, but I'm going to tell you anyways. I had decided to steal a ship and sail back to Buthrotum at this point. Right as I'm about to head out i run into some Danaan war veteran whose asking for our help. Of course Aeneas does decide to help him, even though he led the cyclops right to our ships. We get out by a matter of seconds before the blinded cyclops gets to where our ships were docked. Yet again, Aeneas' fate has led us into even more trouble. 

Unfortunately, Aeneas' father died soon after this. I suppose this was all just a little too much for the man, and although I didn't particularly enjoy his company, it's still sad to lose a countryman.

After this we headed to Carthage, which you already know the story of how we met Queen Dido. So hopefully this back story clears everything up from here on out.

4 comments:

  1. Your voice is still very solid and consistent, and Achates has a clear character. However, you really must MUST proofread these better, because your spelling/grammar errors cause confusion about the meaning. For example: "Aeneas senile old man," as you read on in the paragraph, is clearly "Aeneas' senile old man" (possession), but at first, I thought you were just calling Aeneas senile. Regarding the question of destiny, you did a good job of weaving the theme throughout your narrative, but I think it would be more clearly the theme if you re-addressed it at the end (if possible) as well. Good post.

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  2. I laughed out loud at the tree funeral thing.

    It didn't seem like you directly addressed the question but instead kind of weaved your attitude and position into your summary, and I liked that. I didn't spend that much time on my last post, and consequently my character's emotion and personality isn't really there much. But yours definitely is. Your Achates is sassy.

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  3. I agree with Caitie..
    You're Achates is VERY sassy hahaha.
    I like the way you wrote this..
    I can tell it's YOUR writing..
    :)

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  4. Did half of your story get censored? Perhaps work on your relations with the United States Government...
    Also, I enjoyed the attitude of Achates in your story as well.

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